Some people just "know". Who they are, their place in the world, their plan for the future. They can't explain how they know, they just do -- they always have. Others take a far more convoluted, meandering path through life before finally arriving at that moment where they can say, finally, that they too "know". I fall into the latter group, and I wouldn't have it any other way.
Intro paragraph for overcoming PS Forum
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mteevin
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Intro paragraph for overcoming PS
My PS is going to focus on overcoming mental illness and emerging from it a better, stronger person. Please read what I have drafted for the introductory paragraph and let me know if you think it is suitable.
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tourdeforcex
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Re: Intro paragraph for overcoming PS
it could work if the entire piece is good.
thus far, i have some stylistic qualms: like using "know" in quotations twice. having a second sentence be a fragment. use of convoluted and meandering to modify path: what is the difference between convoluted and meandering? and since your path is convoluted and meandering, how are you a better person from it? and how does that make you a good law school applicant?
thus far, i have some stylistic qualms: like using "know" in quotations twice. having a second sentence be a fragment. use of convoluted and meandering to modify path: what is the difference between convoluted and meandering? and since your path is convoluted and meandering, how are you a better person from it? and how does that make you a good law school applicant?
