Feedback needed - 2nd draft of PS Forum

[nataliejane38]

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[CanadianWolf]

This is probably as good as it gets in terms of personal statements. Clearly & concisely written. Sincere, convincing & informative.

P.S. "relatives'", not "relative's" ?

[lalalawya]

This is amazing. Have you ever seen the movie "Homeless to Harvard?" It can probably be about you . No, but really, I liked the last paragraph especially. It helps present you in a way that shows your appreciation for your past experiences and not your disdain. It is a very powerful statement and one I am sure adcomms will love. Good luck!

[Dustin.]

Going to law school in order to become a lawyer will fulfill my dedication to public interest law and to serving the underprivileged and underrepresented population whose experiences I am in a unique position to relate to.

Doesn't sound quite right to me ... might want to consider rephrasing the last bit of it.

[nataliejane38]

Thanks so much for the feedback. I'll have to check out Homeless to Harvard, I've never heard of it. And I think I will try and revise that last sentence, I struggled with it a little bit and it's still not quite right. Thanks!

[nataliejane38]

Still revising, will repost later.