i know the writing is a lot of "vocabulary" words, but that's just how i write

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because everyone seems to be doing this? i guess i'm a follower. this doesn't bode well for law school.
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I'd second this statement. I like the overall vibe, but IMO, you should include a paragraph or two that shows your ability to empathize and get along with people who have a differing opinion from you. Do you have a friend/ relative who is staunchly anti-feminist but whom you still are close to? Giving an example like that is essential, so you don't come across as unnecessarily argumentative.SortOfObsessed wrote:I like your writing style and the focus of your diversity statement since I am also an asian american female and can empathize.
However, I think this diversity statement portrays you in a negative light. You seem abrasive and contrary, ("I challenged anything I encountered that might remotely have a sexist aspect.") and incredibly defensive. I think you should tone down some aspects so that you do appear more mature. ("Though I am now calmer in maturity and no longer leap to my feet at every hint of inequity or discrimination toward women, it is a characteristic that will never fade." Can you elaborate on how you are more mature?)
Overall I would be wary of submitting this DS as is because some adcomms will inevitably dislike you or think that you aren't going to fit well with the rest of the class.
Always a staunch feminist, as a teen, I challenged anything I encountered that might remotely have a sexist aspect.
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