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MRsimon

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PLEASE critique. Very first draft.

Post by MRsimon » Tue Oct 12, 2010 3:02 pm

EDIT:Revising
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bk1

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Re: PLEASE critique. Very first draft.

Post by bk1 » Tue Oct 12, 2010 3:05 pm

I stopped reading halfway through the first paragraph and I still hadn't heard anything about you at that point. This is a personal statement, not your random musings on life.
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MRsimon

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Re: PLEASE critique. Very first draft.

Post by MRsimon » Tue Oct 12, 2010 3:06 pm

Read it over. Agreed. Thank you sir
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