PS Topic: sports betting, critique needed Forum

[glacierfrost]

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[glacierfrost]

Bump, can someone please take a look and let me know what they think? A simple YES or NO or a 1-10 rating will be greatly appreciated

Also, I am down to edit and give feedback on your essay so feel free to send it to me as well.

[CanadianWolf]

Not good. Seems more appropriate for an application to business school than one to law schools. Somewhat boring due to too many unnecessary details. This is an example of poor writing because it contains every single detail in order to communicate a very simple message. On a scale of 1 to 10 in which 10 is excellent, this is a 2 for those who read the entire essay & a 3 for those granted clemency halfway through.

[glacierfrost]

Thanks for the input CW, I see what you're talking about.