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Feedback would be greatly appreciated on my PS draft

Post by sojuteacher » Tue Sep 07, 2010 11:57 am

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Re: Feedback would be greatly appreciated on my PS draft

Post by CanadianWolf » Tue Sep 07, 2010 12:08 pm

This essay is okay as a personal statement for law school applications because it allows the reader to get to know you on a personal level. The trouble with your writing, in my opinion, is that it is a bit disorganized & not as well written as it should be.
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Re: Feedback would be greatly appreciated on my PS draft

Post by sojuteacher » Wed Sep 08, 2010 9:52 am

Thanks for the feedback. I'll improve the language. Re organization, do you think I should move up the paragraph about enjoying law classes in undergrad before my experience at the law firm?
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