PS - please give feedback! Forum
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apple430
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PS - please give feedback!
PS Removed. Thank you!
Last edited by apple430 on Sat Jul 31, 2010 9:16 am, edited 1 time in total.
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CanadianWolf
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Re: PS - please give feedback!
Two quick observations:
1) You are highly intelligent &
2) You are destined to be a law student at Columbia Law School.
1) You are highly intelligent &
2) You are destined to be a law student at Columbia Law School.
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CanadianWolf
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Re: PS - please give feedback!
Your best & most memorable sentence, however, is open to misinterpretation. This is the sentence which states two supposedly differing views of law both of which are restrictive.
Your final paragraph needs to be revised from the phrase "In my opinion...".
Your final paragraph needs to be revised from the phrase "In my opinion...".
