Personal Statement Draft One... Rip Apart as Needed Forum

[divabole]

Edited to remove.

Thank you for the feedback, will spend a few more days on it before presenting it again.

[CanadianWolf]

Not good. Start over. This is just a chronological recitation of minor events in your life that aroused your interest. This personal statement is too superficial & offers scant insight into who you are & what influenced your development.

[Jack Smirks]

Yeah this just reads like you're reciting your resume and transcripts, honestly I don't even know where to start with this.

[divabole]

Thx for the feedback. Giving it another go.