ROUGH First Draft. Open to comments and suggestions. Forum

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[KatieKat]

Not bad for a first draft. I really like the first half, save for the first few sentences where you refer to yourself in the third person. I had to read it several times to understand that "he" was you, which was extremely distracting. Just write everything in the first person to avoid confusing adcomms.

The second half made me feel very strongly that you should be pursuing a career that involves developing new medical technologies rather than a career in law. I know that is not what you want, but that is essentially the argument you made. Yes, law is important to new medical technologies and these technologies are important to you, but what is it exactly about law that makes you want to pursue a career in it? What do you hope to get out of a JD that you cannot get out of your biomedical engineering degree?

I get the sense that this is not your real reason for wanting to study law. If that is the case, then you should come up with a different topic for the second half of your PS. This one does not feel genuine to me. If I'm wrong, definitely rework the last three paragraphs to sound more passionate and less technical.

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