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[phoenix323]

Your writing style is very sophisticated and your PS is very compelling, until the last two paragraphs. The phrase "I want to be able to contribute to the creation of a better world" is about as generic as you can get, even if it's true. I don't mean to sound harsh, but I enjoyed reading your statement so much that I was disappointed by the ending. I think you need to really focus on those last two paragraphs (honestly, i think they could be condensed into one) and think about another way to end your PS. The way it ends now is the easy way out. I'll bet that a great deal of law school applicants say in their PS that they want to be a lawyer to make the world a better place. You have had some incredbily unqie experiences. Draw on these and create a more compelling conclusion and you will have a great PS.

Good luck on your cycle!

[iShotFirst]

I liked it except for "I listened with the aid of my Spanish", that just sounds bizarre.

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[umichgrad]

the only good study abroad PS i've ever seen. also, "international law" is...well...sort of not real. but still, extremely well written.