Much Shorter Non-Trad DS. Please Critique. Forum
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SMUDallas2010
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Much Shorter Non-Trad DS. Please Critique.
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SMUDallas2010
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Re: Much Shorter Non-Trad DS. Please Critique.
I scrapped 75% of my previous DS so hopefully this is more concise, yet still gives you a sense for who I am.
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Rotor
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Re: Much Shorter Non-Trad DS. Please Critique.
1. Is this a DS or a PS? If DS as the title of the thread claims, it's too long and not enough D...(glad I didn't see the long version).
2. I really hope you don't get an idealist who wants to change the world to read your package. You wouldn't make it past the first sentence.
3. Building on 2, you need to emphasize who you are, not who you are not. Be affirmative. Ditch the "nots" and the "contraries" etc. Also, I wouldn't want "dormant" to be an adjective describing any of my characteristics.
Edit: P. S. I'm a nontrad 1L and I did not submit a separate DS. I think Adcomms know what nontrads bring to the table in terms of maturity and experience and unless it's absolutely stunning, you needn't do more than emphasize what you'll bring to the class in your PS.
2. I really hope you don't get an idealist who wants to change the world to read your package. You wouldn't make it past the first sentence.
3. Building on 2, you need to emphasize who you are, not who you are not. Be affirmative. Ditch the "nots" and the "contraries" etc. Also, I wouldn't want "dormant" to be an adjective describing any of my characteristics.
Edit: P. S. I'm a nontrad 1L and I did not submit a separate DS. I think Adcomms know what nontrads bring to the table in terms of maturity and experience and unless it's absolutely stunning, you needn't do more than emphasize what you'll bring to the class in your PS.
