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PS Critique appreciated

Post by Chaupoline » Fri Jan 29, 2010 6:24 pm

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Re: PS Critique appreciated

Post by Irrelephant » Fri Jan 29, 2010 10:10 pm

check your pm
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Dr. Review

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Post by Dr. Review » Sat Jan 30, 2010 3:14 am

It may just be me, but this PS feels a bit rigid. To me, this sounds more like "What it was like to be stationed in Kuwait" rather than "Why I want to attend law school, particularly at your school"

Again, that may just be a matter of opinion.
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Re: PS Critique appreciated

Post by bees » Sat Jan 30, 2010 3:42 am

Yuck. Nothing happens in the whole thing. You were in the Navy - I'm sure something happened to you that changed you/made you a better person (that wasn't rearranging bunks).

Choose one interesting experience and focus on that.
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Re: PS Critique appreciated

Post by Chaupoline » Mon Feb 01, 2010 2:44 pm

Thank you for the replies.
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