1st draft PS, please share your thoughts, greatly apprec. Forum

[astorlove]

removed!

[umichgrad]

"Boom, boom boom", the continuous [strike]gun shot like[/strike] noise came from outside the building and remembering what a coworker had said did not help put me at ease[strike],[/strike]--it was normal to hear gun shots [strike]going off[/strike]in the middle of the night.  The office location [strike]is[/strike] was not a neighborhood one would consider taking a leisurely walk in, end your sentences I proceeded with [strike]cautious[/strike] caution toward the front of the office making sure the door was locked.  Looking up at the clock [strike]and[/strike] I saw it was already [strike]passed[/strike] PAST nine o'clock at night and there was [strike]no-one[/strike] no one else in the office[strike],[/strike] . I thought to myself, it was time to wrap up and head home.  As I was about to turn off the computer, the loud booming sound felt as if it was just right outside the office building.  As I reached over to the phone to call 911, I felt a red glare in the corner of my eye, I slowly turned to the window and I let out a big sigh, I hung up the phone and felt relieved.  Looking at the heart shaped fireworks in the dark one after another, reminded me that I have not had the chance to visit the nearby park, the sounds were not from gun shots, they were from the near by amusement park's firework celebration.

[umichgrad]

Sorry I couldn't get through more, but there are glaring errors everywhere that make it very difficult to read for content. Please edit your work and re-post; we're not spell-checkers. Also, there are way too many run-on sentences.

[Zapatero]

Are you a native English-speaker? This is completely unintelligible.