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tx1987 · Post by **tx1987** » Sun Jan 17, 2010 8:16 pm

daizee wrote:
Impossible is where I thrive.

I had to stop and tell how how much I adore that first sentence. Seriously, it is just a perfect first sentence. I am in awe of that sentence.

I understood the first paragraph, but I had to read it more than once. It was a little convoluted for me, but then, again, the adcomms might love that!

I'd just break the second sentence up into two. And I'm not sure about the last line about it being a fairy tale. I like it and it shows personality, but I wonder if that'll be too cutesy for them...I just don't know.

daizee · Post by **daizee** » Sun Jan 17, 2010 8:40 pm

tx1987

THANK YOU SO SO MUCH! You just made my day!!!! I really want to go into the pervasive corruption of the healthcare system, since that's what I sadly know so well, but supposedly talking about legal matters is sort of a bad topic. So wanted to tie it in with my resume but then steer clear towards a project that seems safer.

daizee · Post by **daizee** » Sun Jan 17, 2010 9:06 pm

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