How Risky is Prose? Forum

[brigun]

If it were Haiku, now that would be a different story altogether.

[oneforship]

On TLS, I've wasted countless hours, and
so much can never be unread
I'm proud that this is post three thousand
rewarding the poet who started this thread

Your verse PS stands out from the crowd
the depth of your mission speaks for itself
it is no gimmick, but solemnly vowed
eschewing a meter to show them yourself

You're someone unique, it cries with its shriek
no punctuation; lines suddenly end!
your message is sleek and displays much technique
the 'no' pile it'll surely transcend!

your personal statement is the most pretty of prayers
but God, like Godspeed, says "no one cares."

good prose. excellent.

[Ragged]

On TLS, I've wasted countless hours, and
so much can never be unread
I'm proud that this is post three thousand
rewarding the poet who started this thread

Your verse PS stands out from the crowd
the depth of your mission speaks for itself
it is no gimmick, but solemnly vowed
eschewing a meter to show them yourself

You're someone unique, it cries with its shriek
no punctuation; lines suddenly end!
your message is sleek and displays much technique
the 'no' pile it'll surely transcend!

your personal statement is the most pretty of prayers
but God, like Godspeed, says "no one cares."

good prose. excellent.

Yes, thats some fantastic prose, nightrunner.

[Mickey Quicknumbers]

It's lessons are harsh but it's scent sweet as a rose,
I acknowledge the risk that I take with my prose.

I know you like to think your sh*t don't stank
but lean a little bit closer see that roses really smell like poo poo poo

[gaiustls]

To apply I've authored a lim'rick.
Though you may opine it's a gimm'rick,
I find it refreshing,
And not so distressing
As the "prose" of some makes me bullim'rick.

[KMaine]

Having been a high school English teacher for years, I can honestly say that this is one of the worst pieces I have ever read. You clearly have no idea of what poetry is. In fact, you think it is called prose.

Do not send this to reaches. It would likely give even extreme safeties a reason to reject you (and a justifiable one at that).

Comically bad.

[kittenmittons]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

[KMaine]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

[Xnegd]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

[fl0w]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

I think that's actually acceptable. They just tell students to stay away from it to avoid writing fragments.

*disclaimer: i'm not an english teacher. so /shrug

[Mr. Matlock]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

Little Lord Fauntleroy returns!

[Kobe_Teeth]

It's verse, and it's abysmal.

/thread.

[oneforship]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

[kittenmittons]

ITT: Piling on

To be fair, I'm not talented enough to even write what OP did

But hopefully you are smart enough to know not to.

Shouldn't an English teacher be smart enough not to start a sentence with "But?"

Little Lord Fauntleroy returns!

180

[kittenmittons]

You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

Technically, it is a valid rhetorical device that makes your sentence appear as if it were a fragment. Most high school English teachers ignore that clause, because it is infinitely easier to teach high school students to spot fragments without it.

QF incorrect comma usage

[oneforship]

You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

Technically, it is a valid rhetorical device that makes your sentence appear as if it were a fragment. Most high school English teachers ignore that clause, because it is infinitely easier to teach high school students to spot fragments without it.

Mostly I'm pissed because I didn't start the first sentence with "But". fail.

[Zapatero]

You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

I agree, but since we're getting technical, periods and commas always go inside quotation marks in American English. So it should be:

You can start sentences with "But." And "And."

[oneforship]

You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

I agree, but since we're getting technical, periods and commas always go inside quotation marks in American English. So it should be:

You can start sentences with "But." And "And."

this is correct. congrats.


by the way, I'm also supposed to capitalize my sentences when I begin them. but I'm not.

[Zapatero]

You can start sentences with "But". And "And".

I agree, but since we're getting technical, periods and commas always go inside quotation marks in American English. So it should be:

You can start sentences with "But." And "And."

this is correct. congrats.


by the way, I'm also supposed to capitalize my sentences when I begin them. but I'm not.

I like your style.

[Borhas]

I'm tempted to join the others mocking you and tell you to use that, and so I will

It's brilliant use it as your PS!

[gaiustls]

by the way, I'm also supposed to capitalize my sentences when I begin them. but I'm not.

I like your style.

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[jnorsky]

You should record yourself spittin those verses with the beat to Renegades blasting in the background, then send that in.

[09042014]

I end my sentences with prepositions and blame it on my dialect.

[KMaine]

A few issues. First, you may begin sentences with "but" and "and." It is also perfectly acceptable to end sentences with prepositions. An English teacher (and most other intelligent people) would know that different rules apply for standard written English and, for example, conversational English or posting random stuff on the internet. And though there are many different ways to write a good poem, there are also some poems that would make anyone cringe (see OP's "prose" for example).

Maybe I was a little harsh, so I am sorry. But posting that poem on TLS was like hanging a bag of bloody flesh in front of starving sharks. You had to see it coming. If you don't believe me, use it as your PS and watch the rejections roll in. Not smart enough to know not to start a sentence with "but" -- good stuff.

[Zapatero]

I end my sentences with prepositions and blame it on my dialect.

What do you do that for?

+1

A preposition is a terrible thing to end a sentence with.