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MaroonWhite
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cbbinnyc
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Re: Critique my DS?
I'm not an expert on the DS, so take this for what it's worth, but ...
The DS is supposed to show how you will add diversity to the student body, but they're mostly interested in URM's and people from extremely unique situations. Though this statement is pretty well-written and engaging, you never once mention your ethnic or racial background. Furthermore, you do imply that you come from a low-income situation, but, outside of saying that your mother couldn't afford to help with tuition or a place to live (a situation that is far from uncommon) and that you were born in the projects (did you also grow up there? does your mother still live in the projects?), you aren't very explicit about how that affected you or your worldview.
What I'm getting at is: you are sacrificing clarity and straightforwardness in favor of shooting for "literariness". Don't. The story about the commute, for example, adds some dramatic flair but, at the end of the day, many people (myself included) have had to deal with some pretty terrible commutes and it doesn't really tell us anything about how your diverse background gives you a unique perspective that you will bring to law school. Focus on your ethnic/racial background, how you grew up, and how those experiences have influenced your worldview and led you to law school.
The DS is supposed to show how you will add diversity to the student body, but they're mostly interested in URM's and people from extremely unique situations. Though this statement is pretty well-written and engaging, you never once mention your ethnic or racial background. Furthermore, you do imply that you come from a low-income situation, but, outside of saying that your mother couldn't afford to help with tuition or a place to live (a situation that is far from uncommon) and that you were born in the projects (did you also grow up there? does your mother still live in the projects?), you aren't very explicit about how that affected you or your worldview.
What I'm getting at is: you are sacrificing clarity and straightforwardness in favor of shooting for "literariness". Don't. The story about the commute, for example, adds some dramatic flair but, at the end of the day, many people (myself included) have had to deal with some pretty terrible commutes and it doesn't really tell us anything about how your diverse background gives you a unique perspective that you will bring to law school. Focus on your ethnic/racial background, how you grew up, and how those experiences have influenced your worldview and led you to law school.
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MaroonWhite
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Re: Critique my DS?
thanks. Im black, should've mentioned that somewhere lol
