Thank you all for swapping with me. I have read many critiques and have implemented many things that were suggested. My apologies for those people who I haven't gotten back to, but I was swamped. I am still willing to look over some more. For now, I am desperate for some help. I been working on the same PS for over 3 weeks and I can't stand it any longer. Help me please!
Please quote only via PM because I want to delete it after I'm done. Thank you so much!
^ This is the ending for my number one law school. It doesn't give a Why X option, is it overkill to say if admitted, I will attend?