Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

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even2flow
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Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

Postby even2flow » Thu Jan 21, 2010 9:18 am

I was sent an e-mail last night requesting an addendum explaining my increase in my LSAT score. I had no reason to do as poorly as I did. Last sentence is a run-on I think. So here's my addendum.

I learn best through experience. My multiple LSAT scores are a reflection of this trend. After being personally disappointed with my first two efforts, I resolved to focus my studying and utilize the experience to aid my approach of the exam. I believe that my consistent increase in scores reflects my ability to learn and problem solve, and also demonstrates my devotion to attending an institution that will challenge me intellectually as well as provide me with strong career aspects post graduation.

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Re: Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

Postby Snoopy1216 » Thu Jan 21, 2010 9:30 am

even2flow wrote:I was sent an e-mail last night requesting an addendum explaining my increase in my LSAT score. I had no reason to do as poorly as I did. Last sentence is a run-on I think. So here's my addendum.

I learn best through experience. My multiple LSAT scores are a reflection of this trend. After being personally disappointed with my first two efforts, I resolved to focus my studying and utilize the experience to aid my approach of the exam. I believe that my consistent increase in scores reflects my ability to learn and problem solve, and also demonstrates my devotion to attending an institution that will challenge me intellectually as well as provide me with strong career aspects post graduation.


I would re-work the last sentence. Something about it made me immediately think "well it took him two times to show his devotion." If I were an adcomm, I may question your initial drive and wonder what it takes for you to be motivated enough. Personally, I would change the content.

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Re: Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

Postby booboo » Thu Jan 21, 2010 9:38 am

I agree with the above posters' sentiment. I don't think the LSAT is an exam where you try, try again, and your effort for doing so is rewarded. I would place more emphasis on focusing on something along the lines of... "After taking the LSAT twice, I still felt that I had not reached my score potential. Realizing this, I began efforts to take the exam a third time to ultimately express how I can perform when adequately prepared. My third score is a better indication of my law school potential, and my ability to gauge myself."

Do note... I do think that my suggestion is a bit weak, but I relegate this to the fact that, without a specific reason, LSAT improvement addenda are very difficult to craft.

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Re: Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

Postby even2flow » Mon Jan 25, 2010 10:47 am

OK, is this any better?

I learn best through experience. My multiple LSAT scores are a reflection of this trend. Knowing that my first two attempts were not representative of my potential, I refocused my studying and utilized the experience to aid my approach of the exam. This experience, coupled with an increase in time available due to the completion of my degree, is why I decided to take the exam again. I wanted to prove I am capable of performing well on the exam, and to demonstrate my ability as a potential law student.

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Re: Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

Postby even2flow » Tue Jan 26, 2010 12:19 pm

Alright I tweaked it again, and I'm looking to get it out today.

I'm assuming I should address this to this person in particular and write it like a letter, that seems to be the general opinion.

Dear XXXX,

I learn best through experience. My multiple LSAT scores are a reflection of this trend. Knowing that my first two attempts were not representative of my potential, I refocused my studying and utilized the experience to aid my approach of the exam. Once I had defended my master's degree, I was able to utilize that experience to focus my studying, and became confident in my ability to take the exam again. I wanted to prove I am capable of performing well on the exam, and to demonstrate my ability as a potential law student. Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,
Me

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Re: Ok! 82 word LSAT addendum

Postby nouseforaname » Tue Jan 26, 2010 2:16 pm

even2flow wrote:Alright I tweaked it again, and I'm looking to get it out today.

I'm assuming I should address this to this person in particular and write it like a letter, that seems to be the general opinion.

Dear XXXX,

I learn best through experience. My multiple LSAT scores are a reflection of this trend. Knowing that my first two attempts were not representative of my potential, I refocused my studying and utilized the experience to aid my approach of the exam. Once I had defended my master's degree, I was able to utilize that experience to focus my studying, and became confident in my ability to take the exam again. I wanted to prove I am capable of performing well on the exam, and to demonstrate my ability as a potential law student. Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,
Me



The bold sentence is confusing to me.

"Defended" your master's degree? What do you mean...like obtained your degree?

"I was able to utilize that experience to focus my studying." Not sure what the word "experience" is referring to. Getting your master's degree? Taking the test again?

It sounds like you want to say something along the lines of "Once I obtained my master's degree, I was able to harness all my energy into studying solely for the LSAT exam, and this is the main reason I scored much better my last time around."

Either way, you have to clear up that sentence. It is very muddled.




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