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silas84

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Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!

Post by silas84 » Wed Jan 13, 2010 12:15 am

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Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!

Post by athena » Wed Jan 13, 2010 1:35 am

Great work!.. I would not put many of the details in the third paragraph though. I see that's why you delayed to apply to law school.
But since you want to submit it today, it's alright.
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Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!

Post by silas84 » Wed Jan 13, 2010 4:32 am

athena wrote:Great work!.. I would not put many of the details in the third paragraph though. I see that's why you delayed to apply to law school.
But since you want to submit it today, it's alright.
Edit: Thanks. I was debating on what to do with the third paragraph. Actually, this current one is a somewhat less dramatic version.
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Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!

Post by silas84 » Wed Jan 13, 2010 10:42 am

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Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!

Post by athena » Wed Jan 13, 2010 5:15 pm

Cut it short and add it to the second paragraph..i dont see anything else wrong with unless you have prood read it a hundred times....
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