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DS - this sentence cliche?

Posted: Sun Oct 31, 2010 3:02 pm
by silly101
Writing a DS

I have this sentence:

The statement that “life is short” rings true, however cliché and trite, and I am continually grateful for these opportunities.


The idea works with the topic of my DS. But is it too cliche/trite/lame to include this sentence in my DS? I want to somehow still get the idea across

Re: DS - this sentence cliche?

Posted: Sun Oct 31, 2010 3:13 pm
by plenipotentiary
silly101 wrote:Writing a DS

I have this sentence:

The statement that “life is short” rings true, however cliché and trite, and I am continually grateful for these opportunities.


The idea works with the topic of my DS. But is it too cliche/trite/lame to include this sentence in my DS? I want to somehow still get the idea across
It's hard to say without context, but I don't see why you couldn't just cut the first half.

"I am continually grateful for these opportunities." Sounds fine.