Transfer personal statements
Posted: Mon Jan 17, 2011 1:53 am
What did you guys write about? Any suggestions?
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icydash wrote:What did you guys write about? Any suggestions?
UCLAtransfer wrote:The following is merely my experience in transferring, so I make no claims that it is universal.
Depending on how you approached your PS the first time around, it could be rather similar or it could be drastically different when applying to transfer. With my PS for applying to law school originally, I tried to really highlight my writing ability as best I could, as well as relate an experience that would make me "stand out" to adcoms. With my transfer PS, I took a very different approach by simply trying to convey (1) my strength as a student during my first year; (2) why I wanted to transfer; and (3) why school X was the perfect place for me to end up.
Accordingly, I included things such as:
(1) My experience as a 1L (short)
(2) What I learned/what I became particularly interested in
(3) My ties to the area
(4) Why I wanted to end up in that area
(5) Discussed certain programs I was interested in at X school
(6) Discussed strengths of X school and how they would help me achieve my goals
(7) Explained why I thought I would bring something great to the program
(8) Referenced a couple of notable faculty that I was particularly interested in working with
(9) Discussed a secondary journal I was interested in joining, and why
(10) etc.
This probably sounds like a ton of stuff for like a two page statement, but somehow I was able to craft it into something I thought flowed and was pretty compelling. Others may disagree, but I based on my experience I think having a strong, targeted PS can be HUGE for transfer success.
Hope this helps somewhat.
Yeah, that's a strong point and I should have mentioned that. I feel like 1L REALLY improved my writing ability. I felt like I was an awesome writer (grammatical & otherwise) prior to law school, but man have I improved. Rewriting completely might not be a bad idea at all. Thanks.UCLAtransfer wrote:Depending on how you approached your PS the first time around, it could be rather similar or it could be drastically different when applying to transfer. With my PS for applying to law school originally, I tried to really highlight my writing ability as best I could, as well as relate an experience that would make me "stand out" to adcoms. With my transfer PS, I took a very different approach by simply trying to convey (1) my strength as a student during my first year; (2) why I wanted to transfer; and (3) why school X was the perfect place for me to end up.
About this - quick couple of questions. Did you transfer OUT OF or INTO the UCLA law school? I only ask b/c of your username. Generall ~2 pages (but no more) is the consensus for PS' but that certainly can be hard.. do you think this true of transfers as well? I do, so I was just wondering. Also, what do you mean that PS had a huge success for you?? I was under the impression that the "softs" mattered far, FAR less than when one was doing a first-time application process? Very curious about this, because I'm pretty clueless about transferring.. annd because it'll help the OP too, of course. (lol @ OP: sorry for thread hijacking haha)UCLAtransfer wrote:This probably sounds like a ton of stuff for like a two page statement, but somehow I was able to craft it into something I thought flowed and was pretty compelling. Others may disagree, but I based on my experience I think having a strong, targeted PS can be HUGE for transfer success.
Not a grammar nazi, but put the Property down brotha! That stuff can kill a man if he reads it too muchrandom5483 wrote: There is not enough transfer related data for people todisagreeagree with you.
1) Mad props to megaTTTron for writing all that out. It's good to read different opinions, but if you're not reading his, you're missing out. Anything he writes is credited.
icydash wrote:I've begun to write some of my personal statement based on everyone's suggestions. Would anyone with experience mind taking a look?
I'm not the best writer (engineering background) haha...
I did mean disagree.sethc wrote:Not a grammar nazi, but put the Property down brotha! That stuff can kill a man if he reads it too muchrandom5483 wrote: There is not enough transfer related data for people todisagreeagree with you.
+1. I wrote one page and covered the following: 1) I knew what I was giving up by transferring and it was still worth it, 2) law school is a professional school, so national job prospects are important, and 3) ties (if any) to the area.Danteshek wrote:Mine was really short, about 2 paragraphs and half a page. Unless you have a complicated situation, there should not be much to say.
If you guys (and anyone else who transferred) can post what school they transferred to along with what they wrote (generally, like the above quote), it would be helpful. Maybe we'll see a common thread between kinds of essays that help gain admission to certain schools.patrickd139 wrote:+1. I wrote one page and covered the following: 1) I knew what I was giving up by transferring and it was still worth it, 2) law school is a professional school, so national job prospects are important, and 3) ties (if any) to the area.Danteshek wrote:Mine was really short, about 2 paragraphs and half a page. Unless you have a complicated situation, there should not be much to say.
Not sure if you "should" stay away from 'why law school,' but I did. Accepted to GULC (EA, deferred), SMU. Dinged at UT.icydash wrote:If you guys (and anyone else who transferred) can post what school they transferred to along with what they wrote, it would be helpful. Maybe we'll see a common thread between kinds of essays that help gain admission to certain schools.patrickd139 wrote:+1. I wrote one page and covered the following: 1) I knew what I was giving up by transferring and it was still worth it, 2) law school is a professional school, so national job prospects are important, and 3) ties (if any) to the area.Danteshek wrote:Mine was really short, about 2 paragraphs and half a page. Unless you have a complicated situation, there should not be much to say.
It sounds like people generally stayed away from "why law school" (in general), and instead just focused more on "why law school X"
I think this is correct. You're not trying to say why law school because you're already in law school. Presumably you've already answered that question. What they need to know is, why their law school, especially why over your current one.icydash wrote:It sounds like people generally stayed away from "why law school" (in general), and instead just focused more on "why law school X"
Cool -- My personal statement is about this length right now, which is about 3/4 of a page. You found something this short to be enough?Danteshek wrote:I need to transfer for one simple reason. My background in the asset management industry, coupled with my experience this summer working for the Securities and Exchange Commission in Washington D.C., will allow me to market myself effectively to law firms with securities and white collar practices. The only missing piece is a more highly respected law school on my resume. Upon graduation, my first choice is to go to Washington D.C. to work for the SEC. My second choice is to work for a large firm in a securities, white collar or business litigation practice. Although I believe the SEC will consider me even if I do not transfer (since they hired me this summer), many corporate law firms do not (or very rarely) hire students from Southwestern. Also, Southwestern has very few full time professors in corporate law. Adjuncts teach most of the upper division courses. Access to the Loyola corporate law faculty and expanded course offerings will greatly enhance my law school experience.
Thank you for your consideration.
Edit: for what it's worth, my experience has been better. I made law review at Loyola and have a great advisor for my Note on the Dodd-Frank whistleblower program. I'm also taking Business Planning from the guy who wrote the book.
Very helpful
This is what you used as your PS?Danteshek wrote:I need to transfer for one simple reason. My background in the asset management industry, coupled with my experience this summer working for the Securities and Exchange Commission in Washington D.C., will allow me to market myself effectively to law firms with securities and white collar practices. The only missing piece is a more highly respected law school on my resume. Upon graduation, my first choice is to go to Washington D.C. to work for the SEC. My second choice is to work for a large firm in a securities, white collar or business litigation practice. Although I believe the SEC will consider me even if I do not transfer (since they hired me this summer), many corporate law firms do not (or very rarely) hire students from Southwestern. Also, Southwestern has very few full time professors in corporate law. Adjuncts teach most of the upper division courses. Access to the Loyola corporate law faculty and expanded course offerings will greatly enhance my law school experience.
Thank you for your consideration.
Edit: for what it's worth, my experience has been better. I made law review at Loyola and have a great advisor for my Note on the Dodd-Frank whistleblower program. I'm also taking Business Planning from the guy who wrote the book.
Can I ask where you transferred to and what your GPA was when you tried to transfer?Danteshek wrote:Yep.
Anyone who takes advice from a guy with a flipping-the-bird avatar should expect nothing less.icydash wrote:That PS seems overly...blunt.