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Hello,
Can you please look into the below few lines and let me know if you find any grammatical/logical issues with the argument. The below letter is to request for a TOEFL test waiver for my application.Thank you.
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Dear,
Members of the Committee,

I would like to take this opportunity to request that the Admission Committee waive the TOEFL test requirement for my application. I have taken the TOEFL test and scored a XXX/600 in the Fall of 2000 while applying to the Master of Science program. During my stay in the United States for the past seven years, I have continued to improve my English language reading, listening, speaking and writing abilities. This improvement can be evidenced from the fact that I have successfully completed my Master of Science program in XXXX Engineering from XXXX University. Additionally, I have had no problems in conducting research during my graduate years; comprehending and communicating information in English with my colleagues while working as an engineering consultant. Based on the above facts, I can assure you that my ability to read, speak, write and comprehend English will not be an issue during my study at XXXX.
I hope you will take the above facts into account when you evaluate my application. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Dear,
Members of the Committee,

I would like to take this opportunity to request that the Admission Committee waive the TOEFL test requirement for my application. I have taken (use the simple past, took, since you mentioned a date in the past) the TOEFL test and scored a XXX/600 in the Fall of 2000 while applying to the Master of Science program. During my stay in the United States for the past seven years, I have continued to improve my English language reading, listening, speaking and writing abilities. This improvement can be evidenced (I would use "is evidenced" - I don't think you're wrong just that that sounds better) from the fact that I have successfully completed my Master of Science program in XXXX Engineering from XXXX University. Additionally, I have had no problems in conducting research during my graduate years, nor in comprehending and communicating information in English with my colleagues while working as an engineering consultant. Based on the above facts, I can assure you that my ability to read, speak, write and comprehend English will not be an issue during my study at XXXX.
I hope you will take the above facts into account when you evaluate my application. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Isn't the correct grammar "is evident"?

Isn't the correct grammar "is evident"?

That works. "Is evidenced" works, because evidence can be both a noun and a verb, but it is legalese. I've only ever used or saw it in legal papers in work.

My only thing with "is evidenced" is that, to my ears, it sounds unnatural. That doesn't necessarily make it wrong per se, but you don't want to disrupt flow.

Additionally, "from the fact" seems to be in present tense, which would suggest "is evident" makes the most sense.

None of which makes your suggestion wrong, just food for thought.

I would agree with you to change it. It probably doesn't sound bad to me since I use it consistently in legal papers. I imagine how it would sound odd to others.

Yeah, I don't have any legal paper writing experience, but my verbal skills are probably out of the range of most on these forums (albeit, given the company, not all). When things sound weird to me, even if I can't explain why (I learned French in school first, so I never really learned English nouns/adjectives/adverbs, I just know how to use them), it probably needs to be fixed.

That said, again, since the adcomms likely would be familiar with legalese, it might not be an issue.

One potential note though, is would a person who's weak in English know it?