Diversity Statement Critique
Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2012 4:01 am
Hey guys,
I have come up with a draft for my Diversity Statement and I could really use a fresh set of eyes to check it out. I'm open to a swap, but I am also posting it here for anyone who just wants to glance at it and give some quick feedback. Thanks in advance.
"It was not until my teenage years that I realized my grandfather spoke differently from other people’s grandfathers. Around this time, it also occurred to me that my family ate different foods and spoke different languages than other people. It was in these formative years that I realized that the barometer by which I had been measuring normalcy was, in fact, abnormal.
I was raised in a tight-knit Arabic-Jewish community in Brooklyn, but only half of my family was Arabic. My father’s side of the family, being Egyptian, fit right in with our traditional Middle-Eastern community, while my mother’s family, from Argentina, had very different customs stemming from a very different heritage. This made me feel self-conscious as I was growing up. I did not fit in with the Arabic kids because of my Latin descent, and there were few other Latin Jews in my community. I was lost between cultures.
As I got older, and became more self-confident, I determined to transform my unique background into an asset. By my high school graduation, I had taken every Spanish-language class offered in my school. In addition, outside the classroom my father’s family would teach me basic Arabic words and phrases – what my grandmother called “just enough words to get by.”
During my Junior year of college, I went to Spain with an international business class. We were split into teams and I quickly assumed the role of navigator for my team, being the only person in the group who spoke Spanish. Many of the people on my team ate only Kosher or Halal food and were concerned about finding appropriate meals in a foreign country. I taught them a few basic phrases, in Spanish, Arabic, and Hebrew, and we set out to find the Jewish and Arabic neighborhoods in Barcelona. Once we found these areas, we were able to not only get around, but also to get steep discounts from merchants who were pleasantly surprised to hear tourists speaking their native languages. The variety of my cultures, which had always made me feel like an outcast, had enabled me to help myself as well as my friends.
The same features that had once made me feel insecure and embarrassed have now made me self-confident and proud. They have given me a unique set of experiences to draw upon and I am grateful for these distinctive backgrounds, which have so strongly shaped who I am today."
I have come up with a draft for my Diversity Statement and I could really use a fresh set of eyes to check it out. I'm open to a swap, but I am also posting it here for anyone who just wants to glance at it and give some quick feedback. Thanks in advance.
"It was not until my teenage years that I realized my grandfather spoke differently from other people’s grandfathers. Around this time, it also occurred to me that my family ate different foods and spoke different languages than other people. It was in these formative years that I realized that the barometer by which I had been measuring normalcy was, in fact, abnormal.
I was raised in a tight-knit Arabic-Jewish community in Brooklyn, but only half of my family was Arabic. My father’s side of the family, being Egyptian, fit right in with our traditional Middle-Eastern community, while my mother’s family, from Argentina, had very different customs stemming from a very different heritage. This made me feel self-conscious as I was growing up. I did not fit in with the Arabic kids because of my Latin descent, and there were few other Latin Jews in my community. I was lost between cultures.
As I got older, and became more self-confident, I determined to transform my unique background into an asset. By my high school graduation, I had taken every Spanish-language class offered in my school. In addition, outside the classroom my father’s family would teach me basic Arabic words and phrases – what my grandmother called “just enough words to get by.”
During my Junior year of college, I went to Spain with an international business class. We were split into teams and I quickly assumed the role of navigator for my team, being the only person in the group who spoke Spanish. Many of the people on my team ate only Kosher or Halal food and were concerned about finding appropriate meals in a foreign country. I taught them a few basic phrases, in Spanish, Arabic, and Hebrew, and we set out to find the Jewish and Arabic neighborhoods in Barcelona. Once we found these areas, we were able to not only get around, but also to get steep discounts from merchants who were pleasantly surprised to hear tourists speaking their native languages. The variety of my cultures, which had always made me feel like an outcast, had enabled me to help myself as well as my friends.
The same features that had once made me feel insecure and embarrassed have now made me self-confident and proud. They have given me a unique set of experiences to draw upon and I am grateful for these distinctive backgrounds, which have so strongly shaped who I am today."