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Re: quick look at my addendum please
To be honest, I lol'ed. Can you work it in a bit more subtly?The violation was a learning experience.
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Do you have suggestions? I mean it was a pretty insignificant event in my life. I don't want to embellish the personal consequences/"changes" anymore than I have to.CastleRock wrote:To be honest, I lol'ed. Can you work it in a bit more subtly?The violation was a learning experience.
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Re: quick look at my addendum please
I think it could transition a little better, maybe something like, "The incident motivated me to become a member of the conduct board at XXX U."
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Thanks, this is helpful. Do you think it needs to be any longer?hijodehombre wrote:I think it could transition a little better, maybe something like, "The incident motivated me to become a member of the conduct board at XXX U."
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Re: quick look at my addendum please
Are you suggesting it was, in fact, not a learning experience? Seriously though, why do you need to say that at all? Just tell them what happened. They aren't going to care anyways.xyzzzzzzzz wrote:Do you have suggestions? I mean it was a pretty insignificant event in my life. I don't want to embellish the personal consequences/"changes" anymore than I have to.CastleRock wrote:To be honest, I lol'ed. Can you work it in a bit more subtly?The violation was a learning experience.
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You can write it the way you wanted in the your first attempt, just be more subtle. Hijodehombre gave you the general idea of how to approach. You also want to articulate exactly what you learned.xyzzzzzzzz wrote:So you would just leave it at this,
In 200x, during my freshman year at the University of XXXX, I received a disciplinary sanction for drinking on campus. I completed the required five hours of community service.
I thought I would try to make a positive out of a negative. Honestly, the only thing it did (and I'm not going to include this because it won't reflect well on me) is made me see that the university didn't really explain my rights to me during the hearing. They coerced me into talking about things I didn't want to. When I got to my new school, I realized there was a better system in place there with student reps to help make judicial processes more comfortable.
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Yes, I think that hits the nail on the head. I think the other stuff is largely irrelevant. Keeping it succinct furthers the insignificance of it, and the other stuff reads as a rather weak attempt at remorse, which to me would be more telling then the original offense. I mean I doubt you lost much sleep over this...(maybe i'm wrong)xyzzzzzzzz wrote:So you would just leave it at this,albusdumbledore wrote:Are you suggesting it was, in fact, not a learning experience? Seriously though, why do you need to say that at all? Just tell them what happened. They aren't going to care anyways.xyzzzzzzzz wrote:Do you have suggestions? I mean it was a pretty insignificant event in my life. I don't want to embellish the personal consequences/"changes" anymore than I have to.CastleRock wrote:
To be honest, I lol'ed. Can you work it in a bit more subtly?
In 200x, during my freshman year at the University of XXXX, I received a disciplinary sanction for drinking on campus. I completed the required five hours of community service.
I thought I would try to make a positive out of a negative. Honestly, the only thing it did (and I'm not going to include this because it won't reflect well on me) is made me see that the university didn't really explain my rights to me during the hearing. They coerced me into talking about things I didn't want to. When I got to my new school, I realized there was a better system in place there with student reps to help make judicial processes more comfortable.
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Re: quick look at my addendum please
I thought you original idea was fine. It just didn't transition very well. I was also confused by your claim that one the one hand, it was a learning experience, and on the other, that it was insignificant. Regardless, the above reads well and it does seem to have been a minor incident.
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