Help me out please!!!!
Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2020 12:11 am
Please give me some thoughts/feedback and critique on my PS.
Thanks in advance
Growing up in San Antonio I believed there were only a few options for a young black kid like myself. At that time, I was not a serious student because I was involved in the street life surrounded by drugs and violence. It was not until my brother fell victim to one of the notorious criminal gangs in my neighborhood that I opted to take my studies seriously. My passion for law stems from my curiosity in criminal justice system, specifically its perception of young minority men that have a limited amount of options when faced with challenges that in many circumstances seem insurmountable. As I experienced and encountered these issues, I decided I did not want to just be a part of society, I want to change society. As I continued to ask questions and find answers, I developed a passion for education.
For me, deciding to go to college was a financial and social challenge. I did not have the opportunity to attend college with financial assistance and I did not have the benefit of advice from family members. After I was blessed to receive my undergraduate degree from Prairie View A&M university with a major in Criminal Justice. I took some time to reflect on past educational experience, I knew that I needed more to answer these challenging questions I could not answer as a youth. This led me to pursue my Masters degree while working full time. Furthermore, I realized from experiences in a number of organizations while in college that I have a passion and a set of skills that would make a career in law a perfect choice.
During my time at Prairie View, I was the President of the Criminal Justice Club and was selected as a university representative for the College of Juvenile Justice and Psychology. Alternatively, my love to serve others spearheaded my involvement in a number of volunteer and community service project such as Unchanging Hands, and organization dedicated to helping and tending to the needs of homeless individuals. While I participated in these activities, I still focused on developing my skills as a student and exceling in the classroom. Thus, I have great expectations that given a chance in law school, I will extend the same spirit of academic achievement and serving others as I pursue my career.
My first contact with a number of professional lawyers at the Southwestern Association of Criminal Justice Conference in Oklahoma City was an unforgettable experience. I was blessed with an opportunity to present my own research topic in front of more than one hundred members. This allowed me to build confidence in public speaking, a skill that is essential for a lawyer whether or not they are in a courtroom or a boardroom. My passion for becoming a lawyer increased tremendously during this conference. I was amazed at the high level of hospitality from senior lawyers who had attended the conference. As a result, I realized the need for me too to balance my social skills with great technical knowledge.
Having several fieldwork experiences working as a Student Associate to becoming a supervisor at the Brazos County Juvenile Detention Center, I have the capability and proficiency to excel in a career in law. Most importantly, working as a supervisor in a Juvenile Detention Center gave me a unique perspective on the criminal justice system and criminal law as a whole. Being able to understand the full spectrum of education, economics, and professional challenges young people like myself faced will only allow me to begin to solve many of the issues I encountered as a young kid in San Antonio.
I expect to be a valuable addition to the (Insert School) College of Law. As a student at (Insert School), I plan to take advantage of every opportunity that the College of Law offers and know that my commitment to academic excellence will only become more pronounced as a law student. I am well prepared to be an involved and committed student, a strong and sensitive leader, and an individual with a great desire to have a positive impact on society.
Thanks in advance
Growing up in San Antonio I believed there were only a few options for a young black kid like myself. At that time, I was not a serious student because I was involved in the street life surrounded by drugs and violence. It was not until my brother fell victim to one of the notorious criminal gangs in my neighborhood that I opted to take my studies seriously. My passion for law stems from my curiosity in criminal justice system, specifically its perception of young minority men that have a limited amount of options when faced with challenges that in many circumstances seem insurmountable. As I experienced and encountered these issues, I decided I did not want to just be a part of society, I want to change society. As I continued to ask questions and find answers, I developed a passion for education.
For me, deciding to go to college was a financial and social challenge. I did not have the opportunity to attend college with financial assistance and I did not have the benefit of advice from family members. After I was blessed to receive my undergraduate degree from Prairie View A&M university with a major in Criminal Justice. I took some time to reflect on past educational experience, I knew that I needed more to answer these challenging questions I could not answer as a youth. This led me to pursue my Masters degree while working full time. Furthermore, I realized from experiences in a number of organizations while in college that I have a passion and a set of skills that would make a career in law a perfect choice.
During my time at Prairie View, I was the President of the Criminal Justice Club and was selected as a university representative for the College of Juvenile Justice and Psychology. Alternatively, my love to serve others spearheaded my involvement in a number of volunteer and community service project such as Unchanging Hands, and organization dedicated to helping and tending to the needs of homeless individuals. While I participated in these activities, I still focused on developing my skills as a student and exceling in the classroom. Thus, I have great expectations that given a chance in law school, I will extend the same spirit of academic achievement and serving others as I pursue my career.
My first contact with a number of professional lawyers at the Southwestern Association of Criminal Justice Conference in Oklahoma City was an unforgettable experience. I was blessed with an opportunity to present my own research topic in front of more than one hundred members. This allowed me to build confidence in public speaking, a skill that is essential for a lawyer whether or not they are in a courtroom or a boardroom. My passion for becoming a lawyer increased tremendously during this conference. I was amazed at the high level of hospitality from senior lawyers who had attended the conference. As a result, I realized the need for me too to balance my social skills with great technical knowledge.
Having several fieldwork experiences working as a Student Associate to becoming a supervisor at the Brazos County Juvenile Detention Center, I have the capability and proficiency to excel in a career in law. Most importantly, working as a supervisor in a Juvenile Detention Center gave me a unique perspective on the criminal justice system and criminal law as a whole. Being able to understand the full spectrum of education, economics, and professional challenges young people like myself faced will only allow me to begin to solve many of the issues I encountered as a young kid in San Antonio.
I expect to be a valuable addition to the (Insert School) College of Law. As a student at (Insert School), I plan to take advantage of every opportunity that the College of Law offers and know that my commitment to academic excellence will only become more pronounced as a law student. I am well prepared to be an involved and committed student, a strong and sensitive leader, and an individual with a great desire to have a positive impact on society.