Engineers PS Pt 2- Critique
Posted: Thu Feb 09, 2017 9:55 pm
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Thomas Jefferson, here I come.
Thomas Jefferson, here I come.
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Got it. I can restructure the sentences to include less I's.DrGlennRichie wrote:Too many "I", too much bragging. 3
Anabil wrote:Got it. I can restructure the sentences to include less I's.DrGlennRichie wrote:Too many "I", too much bragging. 3
Now with regards to bragging, is it the fact that I said I was promoted? Or something else in nature?
Finally, is the subject matter any good?
DrGlennRichie wrote:Anabil wrote:Got it. I can restructure the sentences to include less I's.DrGlennRichie wrote:Too many "I", too much bragging. 3
Now with regards to bragging, is it the fact that I said I was promoted? Or something else in nature?
Finally, is the subject matter any good?
It kinda started with " I knew I had a daunting task ahead of me but the kid from West XXXXX that paid the bills at home while in high school and college wasn’t a stranger to challenges."
Subject matter is OK but I am so confused about what are you trying to convey
It just didnt come out right.Anabil wrote:I see what you mean. I was trying to touch on adversity without going into detail with that statement.
I'm trying to convey leadership, adaptability, being able to effectively persuade an audience, and finally being able to focus on details without forgetting the main objective. Mostly leadership.