Some feedback on my PS topic/structure- Is it acceptable?
Posted: Thu Dec 08, 2016 2:54 pm
Hey y'all
So first, I have to say that I have very mediocre grades. Second, I have very little worthwhile "struggle" or "insurmountable challenge that I overcame" to write about here. Im just a very very very average, non-URM applicant.
THAT being said, I was thinking about writing about my experiences in bodybuilding. I went from 205 pounds down to 172 with 6% BF. I ended up taking 3rd in my first show. But thats a bit irrelevant. However, I was planning on describing the brutal routine that I dedicated myself to for the 5 months prior, as well as kind of touch on my thoughts as I went through it. I want the underlying message of the statement to reflect that whenever I find something I'm passionate about, I give my heart, soul, and body to it. I want it to allude the fact that, although my grades are poor, I was never truly passionate about my major (I'm your standard, "didn't know what I wanted to do so I picked business and I hate it" kind of guy). Further, when it comes to a career path that I actually have significant vested interest in, my work ethic will carry me throughout the challenges presented (I'd include why I wish to pursue law and why that, unlike my undergraduate education, it truly interests me).
I'm not sure if that makes total sense, but I was just interested in seeing if something like this would even be viable. Again, I can't really think of any huge obstacles/struggles/profound experiences that would be applicable to the statement, so currently I am just looking for an interesting/somewhat unique experience that could be crafted into a personal statement with at least some kind of impact.
As always, thanks in advance for any advice you guys can provide.
So first, I have to say that I have very mediocre grades. Second, I have very little worthwhile "struggle" or "insurmountable challenge that I overcame" to write about here. Im just a very very very average, non-URM applicant.
THAT being said, I was thinking about writing about my experiences in bodybuilding. I went from 205 pounds down to 172 with 6% BF. I ended up taking 3rd in my first show. But thats a bit irrelevant. However, I was planning on describing the brutal routine that I dedicated myself to for the 5 months prior, as well as kind of touch on my thoughts as I went through it. I want the underlying message of the statement to reflect that whenever I find something I'm passionate about, I give my heart, soul, and body to it. I want it to allude the fact that, although my grades are poor, I was never truly passionate about my major (I'm your standard, "didn't know what I wanted to do so I picked business and I hate it" kind of guy). Further, when it comes to a career path that I actually have significant vested interest in, my work ethic will carry me throughout the challenges presented (I'd include why I wish to pursue law and why that, unlike my undergraduate education, it truly interests me).
I'm not sure if that makes total sense, but I was just interested in seeing if something like this would even be viable. Again, I can't really think of any huge obstacles/struggles/profound experiences that would be applicable to the statement, so currently I am just looking for an interesting/somewhat unique experience that could be crafted into a personal statement with at least some kind of impact.
As always, thanks in advance for any advice you guys can provide.