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Any advice or criticizism is much appreciated
Posted: Sat Sep 10, 2016 8:41 pm
by ryanjeff08
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Re: Any advice or criticizism is much appreciated
Posted: Sun Sep 11, 2016 5:39 am
by cavalier1138
Overall, this reads like a hybrid PS/DS. You're going to be submitting a diversity statement (and if you weren't planning on it, you should be), so having your entire PS also revolve around your race will be redundant. That's not to say that you can't specifically reference your race in a PS, but you want to be sure you aren't just repeating yourself.
That said, I think your counselor had good intentions, but I also think they were dead wrong. A good PS focuses on your personal experience and uses it to show why you would be a good law student. It should not be a vague statement about why there aren't enough black role models in scholarly fields. If you want that to be the main thrust of your statement, then focus on why you bucked the trend, not on the general statistics.
On a separate note, this needs a thorough combing-over for grammar and syntax issues. There are some pretty basic errors, and you could probably cut it down by a third if you eliminated all the unnecessary words.
Re: Any advice or criticizism is much appreciated
Posted: Sun Sep 11, 2016 9:02 am
by smile0751
cavalier1138 wrote:Overall, this reads like a hybrid PS/DS. You're going to be submitting a diversity statement (and if you weren't planning on it, you should be), so having your entire PS also revolve around your race will be redundant. That's not to say that you can't specifically reference your race in a PS, but you want to be sure you aren't just repeating yourself.
That said, I think your counselor had good intentions, but I also think they were dead wrong. A good PS focuses on your personal experience and uses it to show why you would be a good law student. It should not be a vague statement about why there aren't enough black role models in scholarly fields. If you want that to be the main thrust of your statement, then focus on why you bucked the trend, not on the general statistics.
On a separate note, this needs a thorough combing-over for grammar and syntax issues. There are some pretty basic errors, and you could probably cut it down by a third if you eliminated all the unnecessary words.
^agree to all