Please critique my (very) rough transfer personal statement
Posted: Sun May 08, 2016 2:50 am
As a forward, I've been told that for transferring more weight is put on 1L numbers. While I'm fairly confident my numbers are strong enough, to be on the safe side I also want to make sure I'm not submitting a garbage personal statement. Apologies in advance for how rough this is. Any/all critique is appreciated.
For as long as I can remember, I have continuously searched for new ways to challenge myself. Rather than settling for the hand life has dealt me, I am driven by a hunger to push myself to new heights of achievement. For me, the choice to embark down the legal career path is yet another challenge I am currently pursuing. However, merely going through the motions of law school is not enough. Rather, the goal I am in pursuit of is a career in law where I can use my past experiences living abroad to build cross-cultural connections between both clients and attorneys. Now, as I am planning my next steps after my first year of law school, I realize that transferring to [school name] is the next step I must take to reach this goal.
The knowledge and experiences I have acquired while at [currently law school] have helped to establish the foundation for my legal career path. From my very first day here, I was immediately challenged by classmates who seemed to be worlds apart from me in terms of intelligence. Listening to their discussions in class, I felt hopelessly lost merely trying to parse what they were saying. While coming into [current law school] I knew that my admission numbers were below average, I was astounded at how far behind I felt relative to my peers. However, rather than conceding that I could never hope to match my peers, I pushed myself to rise to the challenge, and to not let something like my LSAT score define what kind of student I would become. After countless late nights in the library, I carefully honed my understanding of the law. Then, by the time finals arrived, the fruits of many sleepless nights of study were realized when I found myself ranked among the top students in my class. However, despite my successes this past year, I know that I still have much further to go in order to achieve my career goal.
Looking forward, I believe that [school name] is where my path will continue. I believe that learning and working alongside the accomplished students at [school name] will drive me to reach new heights in my legal study. Moreover, I believe that my own personal motivation may help inspire those around me. [School specific points].
While [current law school] helped to start me on my path towards a legal career, it also showed me how much further I need to go in order to achieve my personal career goals. I believe that in order to challenge myself to achieve these goals, [school name] is where my career path must continue.
For as long as I can remember, I have continuously searched for new ways to challenge myself. Rather than settling for the hand life has dealt me, I am driven by a hunger to push myself to new heights of achievement. For me, the choice to embark down the legal career path is yet another challenge I am currently pursuing. However, merely going through the motions of law school is not enough. Rather, the goal I am in pursuit of is a career in law where I can use my past experiences living abroad to build cross-cultural connections between both clients and attorneys. Now, as I am planning my next steps after my first year of law school, I realize that transferring to [school name] is the next step I must take to reach this goal.
The knowledge and experiences I have acquired while at [currently law school] have helped to establish the foundation for my legal career path. From my very first day here, I was immediately challenged by classmates who seemed to be worlds apart from me in terms of intelligence. Listening to their discussions in class, I felt hopelessly lost merely trying to parse what they were saying. While coming into [current law school] I knew that my admission numbers were below average, I was astounded at how far behind I felt relative to my peers. However, rather than conceding that I could never hope to match my peers, I pushed myself to rise to the challenge, and to not let something like my LSAT score define what kind of student I would become. After countless late nights in the library, I carefully honed my understanding of the law. Then, by the time finals arrived, the fruits of many sleepless nights of study were realized when I found myself ranked among the top students in my class. However, despite my successes this past year, I know that I still have much further to go in order to achieve my career goal.
Looking forward, I believe that [school name] is where my path will continue. I believe that learning and working alongside the accomplished students at [school name] will drive me to reach new heights in my legal study. Moreover, I believe that my own personal motivation may help inspire those around me. [School specific points].
While [current law school] helped to start me on my path towards a legal career, it also showed me how much further I need to go in order to achieve my personal career goals. I believe that in order to challenge myself to achieve these goals, [school name] is where my career path must continue.