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Personal Statement Review. I'm about to hit send but I'm scared!
Posted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 5:26 pm
by nikey11!
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Re: Personal Statement Review. I'm about to hit send but I'm scared!
Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2016 2:32 am
by Liz18
You are definitely a good writer. And I'm no personal statement expert, but from my quick read through, my main thought is that I still don't know who YOU are.
Sure, you have told me about many events in your life, but some parts are a little resume-y and perhaps less reflective than they could be. I've learned a lot about your family, but I don't know how you think. I would rather hear less about family history (a bit is good background info though), and then I would want to hear how that has affected you in your life and how those effects will bring something unique to the law school.
I hope my comments make sense. Good luck!
Re: Personal Statement Review. I'm about to hit send but I'm scared!
Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2016 2:41 am
by Big Red
Great, ready to send.
IMO you should remove the "(1983-2009)" bit, breaks with the flow of the paragraph and I'm pretty sure anyone reading this is going to look up and learn anyway
best of luck
Re: Personal Statement Review. I'm about to hit send but I'm scared!
Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2016 3:45 am
by oreomilkshake
Liz18 wrote:You are definitely a good writer. And I'm no personal statement expert, but from my quick read through, my main thought is that I still don't know who YOU are.
Sure, you have told me about many events in your life, but some parts are a little resume-y and perhaps less reflective than they could be. I've learned a lot about your family, but I don't know how you think. I would rather hear less about family history (a bit is good background info though), and then I would want to hear how that has affected you in your life and how those effects will bring something unique to the law school.
I hope my comments make sense. Good luck!
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