Page 1 of 1
my PS draft...need help
Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2015 8:47 am
by hannahv246
hhh
Re: my PS draft...need help
Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2015 11:26 am
by CanadianWolf
After a very quick read:
"patience", not "patients"
The second sentence of the fourth paragraph needs work. Probably best to just delete this sentence.
The final paragraph needs to be condensed.
Re: my PS draft...need help
Posted: Wed Aug 19, 2015 10:41 pm
by Scalvert
Hannah, I sent some edits your way in a PM so I could avoid quoting.