First attempt at my PS, give your constructive criticism
Posted: Thu Jan 08, 2015 5:30 pm
“Are you going to play college football”, my grandmother asked me as my family and I sat around the TV watching The Texas Longhorns play the Texas A&M Aggies on Thanksgiving day. I replied with the typical answer of young boys, a brazen and confident “Yes”. As I grew up, I even began to convince myself it was possible. My family constantly relayed to me the cliché, “you can do anything you set your mind to” and I had bought in on the concept. When it came time to play high school football I was good; I mean I was really good. I began to mull over my prospects of playing college football, when one day midseason I tore my ACL. This is an injury many athletes do not play after but I wouldn’t let it stop me instead I got a knee brace and finished out the season with a torn ACL. My junior year I finally received a letter, not just any ordinary letter, but “THE” letter. It was a letter of recruitment which I had always dreamed of. I frantically ripped it open only to realize I had failed. It was a letter from a football program at a small Division II school. “Not good enough”, I thought to myself.
The next week I began practicing harder, studying the game more intensely, and more importantly I had fully “set my mind to it” like my family always told me. My senior year came and went and I had my choice of division II schools, but when my high school coaches asked me where I wanted to play football I thought about that Thanksgiving day and replied, “UNIVERSITY”. They all laughed because it was the greatest football program in the state, but I knew I could do it. After all, I could do anything I set my mind to and with graduating seventh in my class, I knew I had the grades for UNIVERSITY. My freshman year of college I confidently tried out for The UNIVERSITY football team and made it. I had never been more excited or proud of myself, my family and friends rallied around me in complete support, I achieved it.
The joy of triumph quickly became sleepless sorrow. I was studying civil engineering and between my schoolwork and football practice it quickly proved to be too much. I tried to continue down this path of destruction not only because I loved football, or because I had dedicated my life to this point to it, but more importantly because I didn’t want to let my grandmother and family down. After weeks of anguish, I finally decided to quit, for the sake of my academic career. From this point on I desperately tried to find what it was that would not only inspire me but also drive me as football had. Realizing that engineering was only an interest not a livelihood I switched my major to biology. I had always been good at and enjoyed science. A semester later I applied for the position of, “legal assistant” at a law firm and received an offer. The rest, as they say, is history.
I truly believe that you can do anything you set your mind to. With a passion in your heart and an unwavering dedication driving you I believe the only thing that can stop you, is you. In my twenty-one years of life I have only had one passion that rivaled football, and it’s law. More specifically patent law. Upon finding this passion my life made sense, everything up to this point had been grooming me to become a successful patent lawyer. Obtaining the core curriculum of engineering, the bachelors of science and arts in biology, and a business certificate all laid a perfect academic foundation for the career path of a patent lawyer. The thing is, anyone can achieve these accolades. My true standout virtues are unteachable and untrainable; they are the qualities and skills that football instilled in me. These virtues give me a relentless drive for success and a “failure is not an option” attitude. I’m sure you will receive requests from people with better GPA’s, higher LSAT’s, and better overall applications, but I can assure I have “set my mind” on patent law and I will not allow anything to stop me from reaching my goal. I only hope that I will have the opportunity to do so with the support and teachings of “XXX” Law School.
The next week I began practicing harder, studying the game more intensely, and more importantly I had fully “set my mind to it” like my family always told me. My senior year came and went and I had my choice of division II schools, but when my high school coaches asked me where I wanted to play football I thought about that Thanksgiving day and replied, “UNIVERSITY”. They all laughed because it was the greatest football program in the state, but I knew I could do it. After all, I could do anything I set my mind to and with graduating seventh in my class, I knew I had the grades for UNIVERSITY. My freshman year of college I confidently tried out for The UNIVERSITY football team and made it. I had never been more excited or proud of myself, my family and friends rallied around me in complete support, I achieved it.
The joy of triumph quickly became sleepless sorrow. I was studying civil engineering and between my schoolwork and football practice it quickly proved to be too much. I tried to continue down this path of destruction not only because I loved football, or because I had dedicated my life to this point to it, but more importantly because I didn’t want to let my grandmother and family down. After weeks of anguish, I finally decided to quit, for the sake of my academic career. From this point on I desperately tried to find what it was that would not only inspire me but also drive me as football had. Realizing that engineering was only an interest not a livelihood I switched my major to biology. I had always been good at and enjoyed science. A semester later I applied for the position of, “legal assistant” at a law firm and received an offer. The rest, as they say, is history.
I truly believe that you can do anything you set your mind to. With a passion in your heart and an unwavering dedication driving you I believe the only thing that can stop you, is you. In my twenty-one years of life I have only had one passion that rivaled football, and it’s law. More specifically patent law. Upon finding this passion my life made sense, everything up to this point had been grooming me to become a successful patent lawyer. Obtaining the core curriculum of engineering, the bachelors of science and arts in biology, and a business certificate all laid a perfect academic foundation for the career path of a patent lawyer. The thing is, anyone can achieve these accolades. My true standout virtues are unteachable and untrainable; they are the qualities and skills that football instilled in me. These virtues give me a relentless drive for success and a “failure is not an option” attitude. I’m sure you will receive requests from people with better GPA’s, higher LSAT’s, and better overall applications, but I can assure I have “set my mind” on patent law and I will not allow anything to stop me from reaching my goal. I only hope that I will have the opportunity to do so with the support and teachings of “XXX” Law School.