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Posted: Wed Dec 31, 2014 12:13 pm
by Anonymous User
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Re: PS feedback, please

Posted: Thu Jan 01, 2015 7:14 pm
by mka5000066
So i'm relatively new to this forum, and am going through the struggle of writing a personal statement myself, so take whatever I say with a grain of salt.

I think your ability to story tell and the narrative is extremely intriguing, however there is one main thing that I was looking for an answer to that I never really found, why do you want to be a lawyer?

I would maybe reduce the amount of space you spend writing on your family, although they are obviously important in order to describe how your mindset developed, and spend more time exploring why you want to become a lawyer, and what makes you capable of achieving your dreams.

Also, I would go through and make sure the grammar is correct, for instance, " my teenage years vs my teenager years".

Again, I am not an expert, just someone in a similar position so feel free to trust your gut instinct over whatever I suggest.

Goodluck! I hope you achieve whatever you strive for.

Re: PS feedback, please

Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2015 10:20 am
by Anonymous User
mka5000066 wrote:So i'm relatively new to this forum, and am going through the struggle of writing a personal statement myself, so take whatever I say with a grain of salt.

I think your ability to story tell and the narrative is extremely intriguing, however there is one main thing that I was looking for an answer to that I never really found, why do you want to be a lawyer?

I would maybe reduce the amount of space you spend writing on your family, although they are obviously important in order to describe how your mindset developed, and spend more time exploring why you want to become a lawyer, and what makes you capable of achieving your dreams.

Also, I would go through and make sure the grammar is correct, for instance, " my teenage years vs my teenager years".

Again, I am not an expert, just someone in a similar position so feel free to trust your gut instinct over whatever I suggest.

Goodluck! I hope you achieve whatever you strive for.
Thanks!