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quick grammar question

Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 11:36 pm
by valen
Hey TLS, which is correct? Bolded part is what I am questioning.

“Eugh, what is that smell?”. I froze. That was it; that was the sound of a centuries old Zoroastrian tradition being reduced into one simple, horrifically embarrassing question.

“Eugh, what is that smell?” I froze. That was it; that was the sound of a centuries old Zoroastrian tradition being reduced into one simple, horrifically embarrassing question.

Re: quick grammar question

Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 11:43 pm
by A. Nony Mouse
Second one.

Re: quick grammar question

Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 11:56 pm
by fundamentallybroken
Second. And drop the semicolon. Turn it into two sentences.

Re: quick grammar question

Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2014 12:03 am
by encore1101
fundamentallybroken wrote:Second. And drop the semicolon. Turn it into two sentences.
+1

Re: quick grammar question

Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2014 12:06 am
by valen
fundamentallybroken wrote:Second. And drop the semicolon. Turn it into two sentences.
Done and done, thanks all