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I have decided upon talking about my time after undergrad and where I have worked, including a law firm and the government which led me to deciding upon law.

I did this because it's unique and there some projects/traits that I can highlight that differentiate me from other people.

However, I have written a draft, submitted it to fellow users here and they want me to "show" rather than tell. I am now using specific examples from my past jobs to show how it led me to law and the passion I developed for it. Now that I have done this, my personal statement is pretty long. Before it was just 2 and half pages. Now its close to 4.

What should I do? should I disregard their advice and just go with the old copy? or what. I'm lost.

cut it down to 2 pages?

patogordo wrote:cut it down to 2 pages?

it runs counter to their advice about showing rather than telling. thats the problem. Plus I dunno how much I should trust them. They could be just as clueless as I am. who knows.

Showing rather than telling is right, but tou probably added the showing to the telling, rather than substituting showing for telling. You can probably cut a lot of the telling you started with.

Or, you're trying to talk about too many things. Pick one thing and focus. The PS isn't supposed to be comprehensive.

yea when people say show don't tell they don't mean run through your entire resume but instead of using brief descriptions tell long detailed stories.

pick something interesting and talk about it for 2 pages

A. Nony Mouse wrote:Showing rather than telling is right, but tou probably added the showing to the telling, rather than substituting showing for telling. You can probably cut a lot of the telling you started with.

Or, you're trying to talk about too many things. Pick one thing and focus. The PS isn't supposed to be comprehensive.

I surmise I can shorten the background and just get straight to the projects from work. I'll make sure to sub the showing rather than telling.