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Critique my Diversity Statement please!
Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2014 8:26 am
by Arad
Will be redoing from scratch
Re: Critique my Diversity Statement please!
Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2014 1:44 pm
by smile0751
Are all the innuendos at the beginning intentional? If not, I think you need to rewrite the intro to make it clear you are talking about DJing sooner (I dont think I have a particularly dirty mind...). If they are intentional, I think you are taking a risk, but it's your risk / reward to take.
Re: Critique my Diversity Statement please!
Posted: Sun Sep 14, 2014 2:48 pm
by pancakes3
Stylistically cliche, verbose, and yet lacks a convincing central argument.