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Please critique.

Posted: Sat May 10, 2014 2:04 am
by Anonymous User
Edited and reposted

Re: Please critique.

Posted: Sat May 10, 2014 6:43 am
by Nebby
Too long.

Re: Please critique.

Posted: Sat May 10, 2014 1:13 pm
by Baby_Got_Feuerbach
tl;dr - except the last line

Cut "perfect candidate for admission."