Personal and Diversity Statement Critique -Controversial
Posted: Mon Dec 30, 2013 9:20 pm
If anyone would be willing to look over my personal and diversity statements, PM me!
Both drafts are very rough and I intend to spend a considerable amount of time editing and playing with the sentence structures, but I am hoping for a third party opinion about the content as well as any feedback you may have about the statement structure, tone, etc.
Any and all suggestions are appreciated. I have so much to write about, but I'm struggling with conveying my story effectively. My PS introduction is giving me an especially hard time! I don't think an anecdote is the best avenue, but I can't seem to come up with a strong hook. The struggle is real.
Thanks for reading!
Both drafts are very rough and I intend to spend a considerable amount of time editing and playing with the sentence structures, but I am hoping for a third party opinion about the content as well as any feedback you may have about the statement structure, tone, etc.
Any and all suggestions are appreciated. I have so much to write about, but I'm struggling with conveying my story effectively. My PS introduction is giving me an especially hard time! I don't think an anecdote is the best avenue, but I can't seem to come up with a strong hook. The struggle is real.
Thanks for reading!
