Some feedback please Forum
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malleus discentium
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Some feedback please
Last edited by malleus discentium on Sun Nov 17, 2013 4:37 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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lawschool2014hopeful
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Re: Some feedback please
Erm.......
What is the point of this statement?
At first your Sistine chapel story was cute, then you kept mentioning it... it becomes repetitive and annoying, and it doesn't even result in any great purpose? What is the point of your examples about your concerts and travels lol? You had opportunities in life and you recognize it? How does that demonstrate anything?
Is almost like you are trying to write a romantic novel of some sort, except is not really romantic either,.
Unfortunately, I think this statement needs alot of work before it becomes anything remotely interesting (I would personally just start with a topic altogether).
What is the point of this statement?
At first your Sistine chapel story was cute, then you kept mentioning it... it becomes repetitive and annoying, and it doesn't even result in any great purpose? What is the point of your examples about your concerts and travels lol? You had opportunities in life and you recognize it? How does that demonstrate anything?
Is almost like you are trying to write a romantic novel of some sort, except is not really romantic either,.
Unfortunately, I think this statement needs alot of work before it becomes anything remotely interesting (I would personally just start with a topic altogether).
