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First draft DS, any help would be appreciated

Post by Anonymous User » Wed Nov 06, 2013 4:32 am

Thank you for all your help.
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Re: First draft DS, any help would be appreciated

Post by Anonymous User » Wed Nov 06, 2013 8:07 pm

*bump* anyone?

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Re: First draft DS, any help would be appreciated

Post by lawschool2014hopeful » Thu Nov 07, 2013 12:22 am

I dont see how this makes you diverse unfortunately. You turned a possible diversity statement into a typical immigrant/challenge story, which would be more appropriated for your PS. I think you should focus more, with details your experiences at Sri Lanka, your transition difficulties, and how those experiences shaped you as a person.

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Re: First draft DS, any help would be appreciated

Post by Anonymous User » Thu Nov 07, 2013 4:41 pm

thank you for the feedback jimmierock.

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