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Looking to submit ASAP would really appreciate input
Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2012 2:35 am
by sujigu
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Re: Looking to submit ASAP would really appreciate input
Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2012 2:41 am
by Flips88
Probably don't want to start out with a very abrupt intro showing you giving up on a lifelong passion without saying at all why...
Re: Looking to submit ASAP would really appreciate input
Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2012 2:47 am
by sujigu
ha okay valid point.
Did you read any more of it? Any other thoughts?
Re: Looking to submit ASAP would really appreciate input
Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2012 3:02 am
by bizzybone1313
"My exploration landed me in Antigua, Guatemala in the spring of 2012" Shouldn't there be a comma after Guatemala? Refer to an English book. I am pretty sure there should be. Look it up.