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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2012 5:39 pm
by Anonymous User
Thank you for reading.
Re: Final: Any changes necessary before I attach to my apps?
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2012 1:02 am
by Anonymous User
Come on. 50 views and no replies?
Re: Final: Any changes necessary before I attach to my apps?
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2012 6:39 am
by bettercallsaul91
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Re: Final: Any changes necessary before I attach to my apps?
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2012 9:19 am
by CanadianWolf
I wouldn't change a word. This is an outstanding & very effective PS, in my opinion. Apply above your numbers with confidence.
Re: Final: Any changes necessary before I attach to my apps?
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2012 9:47 am
by EttaJ
CanadianWolf wrote:I wouldn't change a word. This is an outstanding & very effective PS, in my opinion. Apply above your numbers with confidence.
I concur. You write in a way that is touching, and I think it stands strongly as is. Although I empathized with you, somehow you avoided sounding like you were looking for empathy. I was compelled to read the whole thing; you kept me wanting to know more.
I wish you the very best for your cycle!
Re: Final: Any changes necessary before I attach to my apps?
Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2012 10:48 am
by eyescream
really good statement. i don't think there's too much ethos because the subject of the story requires it.
great subject and great presentation. good luck with your cycle.