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Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2012 3:56 pm
by jenlt
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Re: First Draft PS Critique
Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2012 4:02 pm
by WhiteyCakes
For starters it seems jumpy. You need to improve the flow and the connections between paragraphs.
Re: First Draft PS Critique
Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2012 4:58 pm
by 052220151
Its spelled counsel. I got railed my first week at work spelling it council, hth.
Re: First Draft PS Critique
Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2012 4:40 pm
by jenlt
Thanks for the input! I always have trouble with transitions between paragraphs. Also, that would have been horrible to make a legal related spelling error in a PS! Let me know any other corrections I should make or if anyone has suggestions on how to make it flow better!