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Removed this draft, will rework and post again.

Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it.

You are basically just reiterating the facts of the case, which doesn't tell me anything about you.

The paragraph about the rape was uncomfortable to read, and having a list of bad things you've done isn't really portraying you in the best light to an admissions committee. Additionally, it seems more about the trial and not you.

I understand this is probably a very important event that has happened to you, but I don't think it's appropriate for a personal statement. I think something about being a woman at the Naval Academy could be very interesting and compelling, but probably not centered around this particular instance.

you sound like a brave lady. restructure your ps. the beginning leaves people with an uncomfortable feeling that overpowers the point in the end.

good luck

OK, thanks so much for the help.