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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2012 3:12 am
Thanks :)
I personally would only mention your religion in one sentence, obviously it helps define who you are but generally religion doesn't make a compelling story. Notwithstanding, I would expand on your life it comes off as sacrificial yet fruitful.jychun412 wrote:I believe in a minor religion, Won Buddhism, which is a variant of Buddhism that originated in Korea.
When I first came to U.S., I sought support and friendship from the Korean American community in my city. But because most Korean Americans are Christians, I felt secluded. Most of them did not know what Won Buddhism was and thought of me as strange and weird. This hurt me a lot when I was young, and hindered my relationships with others.
What I've learned from having this kind of experience is the importance of understanding different religions in order to identify and work with people from diverse backgrounds. My background will allow me to better serve immigrant communities as a lawyer.
This is a rough narrative of my DS if I decide to write one on this topic. I know religion is typically not a good choice for diversity statement, but I just wanted to see if it could work.
Or is the below topic better? (sorry I've posted it before but it's just for comparison)
Because my family barely manages to make a living off the store, we've never hired any employee during the 8 years that we were in business. This meant that I had to participate in the family business and as a result, I never had free weekends or family vacation throughout middle school and high school. The hardship was greatest when the store we'd owned had to close. When the store closed down, we were left with all the merchandise without money to start a new store. As a solution, my family started going to swap meets to try to sell all the stuffs. I had to wake up at 5 AM every Saturday and Sunday to help out my parents at the swap meet. It was particularly difficult when I had to study for finals and SAT's in the little spare time that I had between customers. After months of hard work, we were able to open a new store, but my mother's health had deteriorated due to long hours of demanding work at the swap meet and I felt greater pressure to help out with the business. While it was difficult to balance work with school, the hardship strengthened my determination to pursue my goals and succeed.
Any feedback would be appreciated
Best of luck.