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I was recently waitlisted at the school I desire attending most and have written a LOCI. Could anybody please look over it and tell me what they think?

I posted a request here but since nobody really looks there anymore, I'm posting here, if mods don't mind of course.

Thanks!

Bah! I really don't want to go to pay for a fancy consultant. Anyone?

sure i've got some free time. PM me

Same ..

Thank you , gents. PM'ed!