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question on ONE paragraph

Posted: Wed Feb 01, 2012 3:24 pm
by swtlilsoni
Topic: I'm talking about how my different experiences in different countries affected me/changed my view or lifestyle

This shift in lifestyle occurred in every place I visited. In Abu Dhabi I experienced a world of extreme Muslim traditionalism mixed with western luxuries, where Namaz (prayers) were broad-casted through loudspeakers and trucks transporting camels drove alongside Bentleys and Maseratis. I started becoming aware of how contradictions coexist around and within us and how they can compliment each other. I once stayed in a small village in Malaysia, watching the farmers plow rice paddies with buffaloes, brushing my teeth with Neem tree sticks, and sleeping under the stars on the roof, making sure the snakes don't get on my bed. Even though the living conditions there were drastically different, and I did not have my iPhone, car, video games, or other advancements I use in the developed world, I was just as happy. This experience allowed me to clearly witness the concept of hedonic adaptation (outside factors temporarily affect our level of subjective happiness but as we adapt it adjusts back to neutrality).

Is the whole thing about hedonic adaptation too scientific? Should I come up with another way village life affected me?

Re: question on ONE paragraph

Posted: Mon Feb 06, 2012 2:58 am
by Liquox
too many lists. cut some of the details. if you must have them, rearrange them so that they read more like prose and less like a grocery list.

Re: question on ONE paragraph

Posted: Mon Feb 06, 2012 5:28 pm
by kublaikahn
Wrong complement.

Don't give us the definition of hedonic adaptation, and you did not witness it, you experienced it. Rather than impress with your knowledge, explain the process of altering your values to minimalist circumstances and the wisdom you attained in that process.