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Thank you, for feedback.

Definitely way too long. I'm not sure a suicide attempt is something you want to highlight for the adcomms, even if it led to fundamental and positive life changes. It's a risky approach.

As far as your current version is concerned, you could eliminate the fifth paragraph entirely. There are plenty of other sentences that aren't adding anything. Honestly, the grammar and usage issues throughout are pretty serious, and most people here don't really have the time or inclination to edit a PS in this condition from start to finish. Do you know any native English speakers with good writing/editing skills who would be willing to work your PS over (whether it's this version or an entirely different one)?

JasonR wrote:Definitely way too long. I'm not sure a suicide attempt is something you want to highlight for the adcomms, even if it led to fundamental and positive life changes. It's a risky approach.

As far as your current version is concerned, you could eliminate the fifth paragraph entirely. There are plenty of other sentences that aren't adding anything. Honestly, the grammar and usage issues throughout are pretty serious, and most people here don't really have the time or inclination to edit a PS in this condition from start to finish. Do you know any native English speakers with good writing/editing skills who would be willing to work your PS over (whether it's this version or an entirely different one)?

thanks for the insight bro, but If I take out the suicidal portion which was a major turning point in my life.. I really don't know what else I can really say...

I haven't written anything in almost a year, I have been out of college for a year and also I am not a native speaker.. Hopefully one of my friends can edit it for me.. Yea I really need to cut out alot of things..

thanks for reading it.

I agree with JasonR's comments above. As written, this personal statement is likely to harm your chances for admission to law school because some may worry that the pressures of law school may overwhelm you.