Rough draft - would appreciate feedback Forum

[coward]

Hi Everyone- Hoping to put applications through shortly. Everything is order except my PS.

I've got 3 years of work experience, and decided to focus on that and 'challenging myself' / getting out of my comfort zone.

redacted version below. Please refrain from quoting it as I will remove it after a day or two.

Thanks very much for your time, and if you want to swap statements, let me know.

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[piousa]

I like it. It does have a strong hook and does captivate interest, however, I think maybe you need to focus a little more on why you want to be a lawyer and what you hope to gain from it in particular maybe which law school you are choosing and why you are choosing that. You have a paragraph about it and its more like an after thought here. I do like the essay though a lot, its really interesting and does high lite your accomplishments, however, just a little more on how your experiences have helped you become oriented towards law itself.

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[shoeshine]

Take out any mention of Am Law 100.

[coward]

Thanks for the feedback thus far. I agree on the length - it started out longer, and this is chopped down, but it probably should be be cut further.

I'm with you Adm - My inclination is to stay away from over-talking to law piece.

Anyone else have a take on the Am Law reference?