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Posted: Tue Dec 06, 2011 4:01 pm
As I walked into the Dean of Students office I couldn’t help but smell the flowers, notice the smiling faces of the people around me, and the cheerfulness of the secretary when she told me to sit down for a moment and wait. None of these moments of happiness could change the emptiness I was feeling inside of me. I couldn’t help but wonder how I let my life get so far off track, how I let my priorities get so skewed, and how I let myself wander so far away from my goal of becoming a lawyer.
It didn’t take long for the secretary to announce to me that it was my turn to enter the office. I don’t think I ever walked with such a heavy step in my entire life. I sat down and they began to announce the charges against me. I was drunk and proceeded to start a fight with my best friend and my roommate. As I was sitting there they were repeating the incident and the possible punishments against me it seemed as though my dream was seeping away. It was declared that I could face a possible punishment of up to two semester’s suspension. Throughout my entire life up to that point I lacked a catalyst, something that would thrust me into change, something I could use to ignite the willpower inside of me. After a long conversation they decided to reduce the sentence to a one term suspension and the catalyst presented itself. After the meeting one of the deans took me aside and told me the one thing I had been waiting to hear my entire life: “He believed that I would be able to change and that I would be able to accomplish the goals I had set for myself.”
His one word believe was what I had been waiting to hear my entire life. Deep down inside of me until that moment I didn’t know if I had it in me to change my life. I didn’t know if I had the ability and the determination to change my path, push through the obstacles that life would present to me, and achieve my ultimate goal. His belief in me was the catalyst for my change. I spent my time off volunteering and working part time at a local retail shop eager to get back into school, eager to show him that his belief in me would not go unfulfilled.
The next fall I returned to school rejuvenated. I felt like a new person, with a new path, and with a sense of resolve not to submit to desires that could negatively affect me. I took a personal interest in every class I was registered for. I no longer drank in excess and I no longer was lured into actions that could throw me off my path. I became a new man, with new priorities, and with a new sense of direction. I was determined to prove my dean correct. I felt a new sense of determination and drive that I had long been lacking. I joined varsity swimming and raised my GPA to a 3.3 the year following the suspension and then to a 3.7. I used his belief in me as a catalyst that changed my entire life. I no longer am a person that doesn’t have a plan, I no longer am a person that lacks the determination and the willpower to push through obstacles, I am ready. I am ready to continue on my path. I will never forget that incident and I will never forget the change it created in me. I am eager for the challenges law school will present me and I am eager to utilize who I am now to push forward towards my goal.
It didn’t take long for the secretary to announce to me that it was my turn to enter the office. I don’t think I ever walked with such a heavy step in my entire life. I sat down and they began to announce the charges against me. I was drunk and proceeded to start a fight with my best friend and my roommate. As I was sitting there they were repeating the incident and the possible punishments against me it seemed as though my dream was seeping away. It was declared that I could face a possible punishment of up to two semester’s suspension. Throughout my entire life up to that point I lacked a catalyst, something that would thrust me into change, something I could use to ignite the willpower inside of me. After a long conversation they decided to reduce the sentence to a one term suspension and the catalyst presented itself. After the meeting one of the deans took me aside and told me the one thing I had been waiting to hear my entire life: “He believed that I would be able to change and that I would be able to accomplish the goals I had set for myself.”
His one word believe was what I had been waiting to hear my entire life. Deep down inside of me until that moment I didn’t know if I had it in me to change my life. I didn’t know if I had the ability and the determination to change my path, push through the obstacles that life would present to me, and achieve my ultimate goal. His belief in me was the catalyst for my change. I spent my time off volunteering and working part time at a local retail shop eager to get back into school, eager to show him that his belief in me would not go unfulfilled.
The next fall I returned to school rejuvenated. I felt like a new person, with a new path, and with a sense of resolve not to submit to desires that could negatively affect me. I took a personal interest in every class I was registered for. I no longer drank in excess and I no longer was lured into actions that could throw me off my path. I became a new man, with new priorities, and with a new sense of direction. I was determined to prove my dean correct. I felt a new sense of determination and drive that I had long been lacking. I joined varsity swimming and raised my GPA to a 3.3 the year following the suspension and then to a 3.7. I used his belief in me as a catalyst that changed my entire life. I no longer am a person that doesn’t have a plan, I no longer am a person that lacks the determination and the willpower to push through obstacles, I am ready. I am ready to continue on my path. I will never forget that incident and I will never forget the change it created in me. I am eager for the challenges law school will present me and I am eager to utilize who I am now to push forward towards my goal.